Feedback

The initial draft of our storyboard had to undertake several adjustments in order for it to improve. Several aspects of the feedback our group received suggested that we lacked a wide range of camera shots. Therefore our group members decided to include more interesting shots. For example we incorporated several close-ups, long-shots, mid-shots, establishing shots and over-the-shoulder shots. This change helped to improve are basic comical storyline into a more appealing and engaging one.  The group’s main focus was to adjust the way in which the titles appeared. Our first vision was to present the titles on a blank screen; in-between each frame. However, this idea prolonged the movement of the characters and the actions which occurred on screen. As a result each shot didn’t correspond with the next and so the storyboard lacked a consistent flow. 

I realised that this wouldn't be beneficial for the audience because it created confusion and inconsistency. After the teacher’s feedback, we decided to completely change the way in which the titles appear on screen. We collaborated that if would be more effective if the titles appeared on the actual moving image in each shot. Also the group also confirmed the titles should remain in the same mid-right potion. Are group found that consistency was a key aspect we needed to include, in order to present clear readable titles to are audience. Another improvement which the feedback suggested was to include small aspects of comical dialogue when the characters were interacting; to ensure the audience are aware if the genre of the film. It also adds understanding to the personalities of the characters. After hearing this suggestion the group decided to incorporate a scene where the characters would ‘rap’ against one another in an amusing way. This idea helped tie up the end of the title sequence by aiming to further engage the audience and make them laugh.

The feedback are group received really help to put our storyline into perspective, and encouraged us to re-think the ending of our title sequence so it would interest the audience. Altogether I think our re-drafted storyboard provides a visibly clear story but remains appealing and relevant to our chosen gene, comedy.